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Rocki
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Joined: August 13, 2002
Posts: 1029
|  Posted: 2003-12-10 03:41
Monday in class, my boredom reached a new level. So i pulled out my notebook, and started writing a story. So up to now, i have a 12-page story, with the end not nearly in sight. I'll be posting a chapter (one page) every day, or every 12 hours, according to demand and whether i feel like typing 
I hope you enjoy my very first attempt at writing some fan fiction whatsoever.
Rock
PS: Feedback gladly accepted 
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Major Update and Bumpage. Found back the papers with my story on them, and decided to get back on track. The newest part is Part 16 (on page 5), but I advise you to re-read the story if you don't remember it
Also, as a reminder, do not compare this fiction to the game. It's set in the DS universe only.
[Another one]
BackSlash was kind enough to combine the entire story in one page, find it HERE. <--- dead link removed
[Here we go again]
Yeah yeah, I know, it took me long enough. Bite me. Bumped, and the finish is within view now. I gotta write a couple more chapters though, and its been over a year since I wrote the first 18... as always, be patient.
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Rocki
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| Posted: 2003-12-10 03:50
Part 1: Silence
The Empire was silent. Unwilling to draw attention, all operations in the human territories had been stopped. The defence of the outlying systems had faded, and the humans had taken advantage of it. The rebels had conquered the Barnard's Star and BD-43*44A systems, while the Impirialists took the Lalande system. And suddenly, they realized how weak the Empire was. Settling their previous quarrels, they now turned their combined strength towards the Empire.
Epsilon Eri fell relatively easy. Realizing they were greatly outnumbered, the warriors fled into the presumed safety of the Procyon system. The humans plowed through Epsilon Eri with such speed the warriors in Procyon were unprepared for their arrival. One attempt at defending was made... then, this system was abandoned as well.
As the warriors entered the Home System, Sirius, no further delays were tolerated. Enormous minefields surrounded the gate, ready to tear apart any invading humans. All warriors patrolling the back systems, Lacaille and Groombridge 34, were called back to defend their homes.
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XxIceDreamxX {C?}
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From: Santas Grotto North Pole Earth Sol
| Posted: 2003-12-10 05:14
this could turn out good  (aslong as k'luth dont dominate everyone..again)
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Pope
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Joined: June 11, 2002
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From: World of tomorrow
| Posted: 2003-12-10 05:45
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Part 1: Silence
The Empire was silent. Unwilling to draw attention, all operations in the human
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dont tell me THEY are coming..
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Victor Davion [TSLTB]
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Joined: May 31, 2003
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From: Canada
| Posted: 2003-12-10 07:25
Yes this could turn out good *Cheers on the K'luth for some reason*
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Hussaro
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Joined: November 20, 2002
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From: Antwerp, Belgium
| Posted: 2003-12-10 08:04
Woooo! I like the beginning definatly!
Nice to see a K'Luth writing about the fall of the K'Luth empire... HOWEVER... Its falling in the beginning of the story, so I fear somethign bad is gonna happen to the poor h00mans... I just hope that MoA ends up as the heroes of the day 
Nice work hon!
Keep it comming!
~Hugs Huss~
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Rocki
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Joined: August 13, 2002
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| Posted: 2003-12-10 14:56
Part 2: Fear
Days passed. Scouts and Hunters hadn't spotted any humans enttering the system through the gates. By this time, the first forward vessels should have been scouting as the last planets in Procyon fell. The acolytes grew restless; the warriors hungered for battle. Fear struck all K'luth. This delay could only mean one thing: the humans would not risk a quick strike. They were planning a siege, amassing their numbers before attacking.
To be aware of what awaited them, the warriors had assembled a team of volunteers. They would take one of the fastest ships in the fleet, a Stinger-type Predator, into the Procyon system to find out more.
Mere hours after the ship had entered the gate, it returned, baring the most unbelievable news: the Procyon system was empty. No human fleets amassed at the gate or at a planet. Save for some civilian transports, the system was deserted.
Pure horror struck all K'luth. Preparations had been in vain. The humans had given up speed, not for strength, but for stealth. Even though it would take them several more days to arrive in the system, they would not be detected untill it was too late: when they would attack the first planet.
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Antdizzle
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| Posted: 2003-12-10 15:20
MUHAHA this is awsome
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Grimith
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Joined: August 09, 2003
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From: Your local future farm.
| Posted: 2003-12-10 18:07
~....that's definitely freaky....
~Now I'm kinda wondering what happened to the Human forces... if they were actually delayed... or... something else happened.
~*eyes Victor in the lobby before continuing again* ...like all of the humans being eaten by mutant killer cookies. x_x
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Victor Davion [TSLTB]
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| Posted: 2003-12-10 18:17
hey i had nothing to do with it my mutant killer cookies can't eat metal just whole people..
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Antdizzle
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| Posted: 2003-12-10 18:37
i'm pretty sure they must've long jumped
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Quistis {C?}
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| Posted: 2003-12-10 20:56
Very nice Rocky keep it coming....
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XxIceDreamxX {C?}
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From: Santas Grotto North Pole Earth Sol
| Posted: 2003-12-11 05:08
yes quissy will enjoy having her whole race fall about her..lol
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Axianda The Royal
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From: Axianda
| Posted: 2003-12-11 05:26
nice rock didnt know you had this kind of talent...
and these short chapters make it even more fun to read 
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Dimorrow
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Joined: September 25, 2003
Posts: 94
From: West Midlands UK
| Posted: 2003-12-11 06:25
keep it going rock my man,
but if kluth win it i will kick your ass proper
grrrrrrr to all kluth ecm forters
ash
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